Revise essay 2-02b World history

It is very great I watched two movies from the website. They were about Egypt and The Ice Age. I have leaned a little about Egypt. But I did not know particular about the country. I have also leaned The Ice Age but I did not know detailed about the age. That movie gave me a lot kind of knowledge.

I did not know about Egypt but I was interested in about the country so that I have watched a TV program before about it for a few times for example pyramid, Tutankhamen, Cleopatra and so on. Egypt has a lot of pyramid and they are very mysterious and beautiful, I think. This movie from the website showed me about pyramid. I always think that how the early people built that pyramids. It is very great and wonderful thing!! There were not crane and any other machine!! And Egypt has a very great river. The name of river is Nile. The river is the longest river in the world. I think that Egypt has not only great history but also beautiful river. I also think that that day’s people are very smart.

I did not know about The Ice Age and I was not interested in that age. But this movie showed me a lot of knowledge. I think that the most important thing for that age’s people is fire. It is very important for us but it is more important than now. If it were not for fire, I could not eat food, warm up and so on. Fire protected them from outside enemy especially wild animal. They had not weapon like now. They made a lot of weapon to protect selves. The masterpiece is carving knife and which was made of stone. It has a lot of different kinds. Thanks to them, they were able to cut meet so that they could eat food easily. If I had been born that day, I could not have live for a long time. I think that that day’s people ware very strong and help each other than now. The nature is also beautiful than today, I think. I think that because there were no car, factory, deforestation and so on, it is very hard to live in that day.

I think that I’m happy because there are a lot of convenient things in the world.
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My action plan

I read my friend’s blog. I think that they use a lot of pictures on their blog so that their blog are very great. They say that we try to write everyday (Shiori, 2009,07,3), write more cute (Hanako, 2007, 07,13), write more own words (RieM, 2007,07,9) and put a lot of interesting pictures (Shiori, 2009, 07,03).
I will try to write more and write everyday with a lot of pictures.
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Blog handles Blog titles Post titles Post dates URLs
Hanako Hanako's blogg Portfolio for Writing III 13.Jul http://hanako0814-hanako.blogspot.com/search?updated-max=2009-07-17T18%3A52%3A00%2B09%3A00&max-results=7
Haruna Haruna's blog Portfolio for Writing III 8.Jul http://harunasblog.blogspot.com/2009_07_01_archive.html
Yuria Yuria's blog Portfolio for Writing III 24.Jul http://yuriasblog.blogspot.com/2009_07_01_archive.html
Rie RieM's diary Portfolio for Writing III 9.Jul http://riemsdiary.blogspot.com/2009_07_01_archive.html
Shiori Shiori's blog Portfolio for Writing III 3.Jul http://shioris.blogspot.com/2009_07_01_archive.html